Destined For Nothing...
Tell my why so many have to die.
Tell me why they all have to lie.
What ever happened to those days,
That we all just ran in the suns rays.
Happy and free.
All was good from what we could see.
There were no wars, no discrimination.
The world was our salvation.
But as we grew old things were not the same.
For many it was about fame.
Wars became reality.
They broke out with no formality.
This world is not what it was.
All this because,
Of those little things.
Wedding rings.
Racial strings.
Belief brings.
Hate and war.
Why can't things be like they were before.
Back when colour ment nothing.
When apologizing,
Wasn't so bad,
We weren't all so sad.
This world's gone mad.
Look at that young lad.
Barely an adult.
Its almost an insult.
These poor people sent away.
Mothers pray.
Fathers fight by their side.
We all have too much pride.
These wars, this suffering.
These actions that are life altering.
So many die.
So many cry.
We're all filled with lies.
Its time for us to rise.
Free out family from the never ending pain.
Pray for all those who have been slain.
End these wars with peace.
Make all the fighting cease!
(C) 2006 Brianna Brown (AKA Blondie) All Rights Reserved, All Wrongs Justified. SEASE Productions.
posted by SEASE @ 10:26 a.m.
10 comments
10 Comments:
i like that...tell blondie she's pretty spiffy. those words exactly. right now. go. :)
blondie told me to read that one;
different from all her other poems..
and i LIKE it. <3<3
haha.
It lacked...a lot. There was nothing special to that poem. It didn't have any personality. Plus, it seemed like the rhyming was forced.
This was a very cliche subject matter. Perhaps it could have been approched from a different angle. She should have been writing a rant in a blog, instead.
This poem did not exhibit any literary divices. Perhaps next time she should use some to capture our attention. More sensory stimuli in this poem would have also greatly inhanced it.
The art of poems is describing something in the least amount of words in the most effective way; it is not rhyming.
But, keep expressing yourself, and keep getting better.
Tell blondie that. Those words exactly. Right now. go. :)
- J.A.
hey, lol wow can't believe blondie wrote that, krazy, when i started reading i was like cool, more of sean's musings, when i got to the bottem i was like WOAH, copywrite BLONDIE!?
joanna....if that is really what you think of this poem i think that you have missed the point to it. from the sounds of things you really dont no much about poetry but you try very hard to look like you do
Blondie this poem was writen with great skill and seems like you put alot of thought and feeling into it. everyone sees things differently and you have done an exaltent job at showing your side on this matter...we all loved it very much
forget what this wan'na be poetry writer says i have seen enough poetry at my job to no a good poem frm a bad one and this one was amazing keep up the great work
i would really love to publish some of your poems if you would like we'll have to get into contact sometime and work out a deal
...Considering I've been away from civilisation for 5 days straight...I think I have the right to say this.
WHAT THE FUCK?!
First off, Thomas...Piss off.
Second off...Joanna, who are you and how did you find my Blog? Off of my Nex or something? Also, why are you attacking someone you don't even know. We appreciate your criticism...but what the hell?
Also, who are you "Anonymous"? Miss McGinty, perhaps?
thanx guys im glad you liked it ...
joanna if you dont no anything dont comment...
anonymous thanx for the offer but id rly rather not publish my poems this is the only one ive ever let out past my circle of friends and i plan on basicly keeping it that way
You know, the comment box is really no place to rude on somebody's creative expression. I'm very dissapointed in joanna anonymous' comments. It's so much stronger to say YES to what you love, Joanna, than it is to say NO to what you don't. Please.
xo
The Daily Beard is commenting on my Blog? Wow...Where did all this publicity come from? Please, I love comments and feedback on my Blog, but please leave me a message saying who you are, how you heard of this Blog, and what you think of it. At this point, I'm lost...which isn't necessarily a good thing considering I'm the "Web-Master" of this little production.
Very pretty design! Keep up the good work. Thanks.
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